Script Review First Draft

The first thing that i think works in my Script is my Storyline because it is so close to home, and its a really a touching story to people that don't know what happened. The second thing i think that works is my dialogue because it is quite touching and heartfelt. The Third thing i think works is the characters because they are mostly male and this different to most plays i have seen before because their is normally a equal amount female and male whereas in my play i have mainly male.
 The first thing that requires development is my structure because i do not really have one at the moment, so i need to figure out how to structure it, I also need to add more to my Script in order to make any editing, I also think i need to have a read though to see how it sounds up on its feet before i change or do anything to the play.
I will make changes like cutting down my main characters long monologues because i feel like she has so much to say and i do not want her to say it all at once i would like to space her lines out a bit more because they are all close together, i do not think that is correct at this point in the play. I feel like my main character gives away to much of her pain whereas she should space it out more so it makes more tension during the play so its not right at the start of the play.
 In the final piece i would like

Rosas Review

Rosas Review

 

Rosas consists of 8 sections these sections are 1, Moving In 2, Floor 3, Chairs 4,Buliding 5, Glass Interior 6, Laying Down 7, Inner Court 8, Coda, in the stage Version there are only 4 dancers where as in the film version there are 18 dancers. The filmed Version is set in and old School in Belgium this is the specific place that Rosas wanted as it brings in a lot of natural light, this light would be used in the dance.  

The danced was first performed in in 18983 and filmed in 1997, they style of dance is Post-Modern and though-out the dance you can see they use pedestrian like movements, these actions are very repetitive, they whole piece is energetic and dynamic, this becomes more apparent though-out as the camera becomes the composer and choreographer by taking us on journey, the camera is zooming in and out layering images to become a rhythm by filming the piece we are able to see more of the dancers and all the different angles that there is to see. The music was composed by Thierry de Mey and Peter Vermeersch, the music changes as it get to the end as the dancers create the sound from their breathing and they bodies.

The Costume they use is very plan and dark and also looks very easy to move around, they would have needed something that is easy to move in as they move a lot though-out the dance.

I like the fact that it was filmed in a school as it does bring natural light in but also because it goes with the style of dance they are using and performing, it also gives the idea of the un-known like you don’t know what is going to happen next it was not Predictable, If I was to change anything it would be the actions I would not use so much repetition, as I think it got a bit boring at times seeing the same movement though-out.